13.11.09
my monster's name is pinky and she has some friend's called fatso and browny & grassy & browny is brown & white & looks like a panda & has claw"s like a panda & fatso is purple & fat and he is so wobbly body & has a sock in his puku & has rotten black teeth & grassy has green grassy hair & a purple & his body is dark green & a banana nose & mouth & all of pinkys friends eat the same things like eating out of the toilet & eats all the fruit and perfume and rubish and browny lives in a three and grassy lives by ants & fatso lives in a big cave & she likes bugs & pinky likes pink & yellow & green & she likes reading and music & talking to much & playing video games & watching tv & she likes to play with all of her friend's & cat's are scared of them & heap's of people are scared & all the animal's and he likes to do is doing art and go to the bech and likes to get birnt in the red hot sun and she has
Cool story Taits. You need to split your sentences up into ideas.
How about using these as possible sentence starters: He also has....
Another ting he likes to do is...thank's....
13.11.09
my monster's name is pinky and she has some friend's called fatso and browny & grassy & browny is brown & white & looks like a panda & has claw"s like a panda & fatso is purple & fat and he is so wobbly body & has a sock in his puku & has rotten black teeth & grassy has green grassy hair & a purple & his body is dark green & a banana nose & mouth & all of pinkys friends eat the same things like eating out of the toilet & eats all the fruit and perfume and rubish and browny lives in a three and grassy lives by ants & fatso lives in a big cave & she likes bugs & pinky likes pink & yellow & green & she likes reading and music & talking to much & playing video games & watching tv & she likes to play with all of her friend's & cat's are scared of them & heap's of people are scared & all the animal's and he likes to do is doing art and go to the bech and likes to get birnt in the red hot sun and she has
Cool story Taits. You need to split your sentences up into ideas.
How about using these as possible sentence starters:
He also has....
Another ting he likes to do is...thank's....